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    Suiseiseki
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    Tips for my poem?

    Post by Suiseiseki on Tue Oct 19, 2010 11:58 pm

    I have to do this poem for my English class. And I'm wondering if you guys like it or not... It's kind of a 'go wherever you want to' poem. It's basically a metaphor of my entire life. I always would stay back and not do anything, but now that I have gotten more into life, I've realized how much better life is like that. So erm... Yeah. xD

    Subdue Silence

    Subdue Silence, how I hate you.
    Screaming in a world of deaf people is not what I wish for.
    Subdue Silence, how dare you.
    I have so much to live for.

    My opinion is not worth a cent,
    for my thoughts are subdue.
    My world is bent,
    for being new.

    Subdue Silence, how I hate you.
    Screaming in a world of deaf people is not what I live for.
    Subdue silence, how dare you.
    I have so much to live for.

    Now it comes to an end,
    my life loose on a thread.
    Perhaps I broke the pain,
    It was tough getting through this game.

    Subdue Silence, how I bypassed you.
    Now screaming in a world of people with hearing is what I wished for.
    Subdue Silence, how I bypassed you.
    I became so much more.

    Anything you can bypass,
    as long as you can last.
    For now I am feeling great,
    I have so much more to bait.

    Subdue Silence, how helpful are you,
    Teaching me what to wish for.
    Subdue Silence, how helpful are you,
    You taught me so much more.


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    Re: Tips for my poem?

    Post by Dylan on Wed Oct 20, 2010 7:12 am

    I don't know sorry, I can't do poems.


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    Re: Tips for my poem?

    Post by KMS on Sat Nov 27, 2010 1:45 am

    I can't either, even though this assignment is already prolly due..

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